Review Detail of DaoistglcrYM in Dual Cultivator Reborn[System In The Cultivation World]

An above-average story, the writing quality is ok with missing commas, uncapitalized names, and a few awkward sentences. But not really a big drawback. The updates are constant, the story itself is good and holds a lot of potential. It also has decent world-building. The problem is mostly with the character design, they all seem to lack maturity and there are a lot of dumb moves by the MC (considering his age (35) at both life he should have higher maturity.) He acts like a new teen, here are a few instances I remember. (spoilers ahead) At the start of the story, he sees a woman in danger and goes ahead fighting the people taking her without even understanding his situation or if it could affect him or his family negatively. It would make more sense if he had some time in this world to understand whether his action means the death of his family. But that isn't really something you can fault him with too much, but what makes one annoyed is that later even after he is warned he had made enmity against a big force he doesn't bother to understand what he has done. (Of course, this bites him back) A day later he takes an arrow for the same woman he has just met, he is poisoned with incurable poison. Once his cheat solves his problem, his response for how he got healed is, "I don't know", which makes his grandfather more interested in finding out. Leading to the next problem. Anyway, this "grown" person later meets a very powerful cultivator and starts arguing with her because she calls him a kid. How he shows his maturity is by shouting, "I have a dual cultivating partner so I am not a kid." Later when she doesn't call him a kid, "I am so happy she didn't call me a kid when she spoke this time." You get more examples of him and others that act rather immature, these actions/dialogues and few grammar mistakes take away from the story. Even with all of this, it is still worth a read. Writing Quality - 3 Stability of Updates - 5 Story Development - 4 Character Design - 2 World Background - 4 The total score 3.6