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2021-08-01 09:46

I think an editor is needed... this is potential to the story but it's rushed ND confusing I could only read the first 8 chapter... but I enjoyed it and the fact that it wasn't the typical story, think with guidance and fleshing out the plot and characters this would be a real gem

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