Review Detail of dreamver2 in His Ruthless Ex Wife

Let me just say that this genre is right up my alley in terms of what I like to read! I can see myself continuing with this one as I love dramatic romance stories! Here are my notes after reading all 15 available chapters: ~I think it would help to check punctuation! Right in the first chapter, I noticed a run-on sentence and an introductory clause without proper punctuation. Specifically, looking at dialogue punctuation would also polish the story more. On the topic of conventions, try to keep your verb tenses consistent, and check capitalization! I can add some comments on the early chapters if you'd like, though I think a lot of these errors would be caught if you quickly ran the draft through a grammar app before publishing. ~I found the opening engaging because you started with dialogue. Great job on capturing my attention right off the bat! (Plus, who doesn't love what's essentially a good enemies-to-lovers set-up?) I do wonder if the plot would have worked better if it started while they were married instead of when they first met...? It seems like those details should have come later, but they also work in the sense of setting up the couple's conflict. It's just jarring to jump from the very beginning to the end of their relationship, though I like how the early parts of their relationship are interspersed throughout the main narrative in later chapters. ~While I really enjoy the description you have, I think your story could benefit from some more! On my computer, almost all the paragraphs are two lines. Alternatively, I think you can combine some of these small paragraphs. Plenty of these sections have similar content to the ones around them. ~I like how the FL isn't unnecessarily mean but sticks up for herself! Great characterization! (She almost reminds me of lakorn characters, and I really like that vibe from her.) At times, she's rather harsh, but it seems as if she was hurt to the point of becoming that way when she corrects/contradicts herself. Originally, I wanted to know more about her emotions, but from chapter 7 onward, I think you do a good job establishing another side to her character (with wonderful descriptions as well). ~I do feel like the ML is weaker next to her. With fewer scenes than Lucy, Li Xuan's cold personality feels less distinct; however, I do think you're on the right track as far as his character development goes. I like seeing how he's the one chasing after his ex-wife rather than the other way around, and I think that's a good way to enhance the plot. ~I also always enjoy seeing the apathy versus hatred idea utilized! I think it helps to develop Li Xuan's feelings toward his ex-wife and vice-versa. ~Lucy's interactions with her niece are lovely! I'm glad you treat Omisha like another character and not the token child who barely talks. In chapter 3, though, I think having two of Lucy's scenes right next to each other is unnecessary (the ones about the shower and eating). While I'm not the best about taking out unnecessary scenes, ask yourself: Does this scene have any relevance to the plot, or does it confuse the main goal? The food scene is good about highlighting the cultural differences, but the scene before is confusing with the shifting perspectives. ~I also love her interactions with Krish and his personality in general! He seems like a fun person. Their banter has some wonderfully humorous lines, which are among the best in the story. ~On top of the other bullet point, I'd also caution you about all the POV shifts within some chapters. They are okay in moderation, but if they switch every few paragraphs, consider if the scene is necessary or can be fleshed out more to create a smoother narrative. ~I mentioned lakorns earlier, but it's ironic how a lot of the story feels like it's based on a television show. (I promise this isn't necessarily a bad thing!) Alongside the short POV shifts, this is especially obvious with the occasional recaps at the beginnings of chapters. It might help to remove these bits. Most readers will probably binge-read chapters like I did and will remember a sentence from right before the end of the previous chapter. (There's no harm in leaving them, though, if that's the intended effect.) ~This is probably going to be my most random comment. I'm not sure if you're aware of this, but while "Moonshine" is theoretically a pretty word, I've always known it to refer to alcohol (usually illegal liquor)! It feels odd being the name of the school. (This is an extremely minor critique, but I thought you might like to know! I've made similar mistakes as well when it comes to certain slang.) ~I found myself taking fewer notes as I read more, so I'd say the flow of the story got better as it went on! Apologies if I wrote too much! This is the genre I'm most familiar with. I look forward to seeing where the story goes, and wonderful job so far! :)