Review Detail of proking in BENEATH THE SURFACE: RISE OF THE GOD

I read the prologue and the first chapter. I must say, author worked hard to explain the story properly. I quite like the story about the sci-fi artificial intelligence robot and it's dominance over the world due to mysterious reasons. The plot has endless potential, to be honest. Since it's new, the characters are not properly developed but I think if the author designed them well, they'll surely become strong characters. This result might also impact reader's involvement in the story as their own. I'm hoping for the best in the future. There are some pros and cons in this novel. Like, the novel writing still lacks some quality and organized pattern. For example, some dialogues need to be rewritten and organized well, in one line for each speaker. Meaning, don't lump in all dialogues of various speakers in one paragraph. It would create confusion and questions for readers on who's talking to who. Keep that in mind, author. In some cases, the explanation is stretched too long, like some unnecessary stuffs added to make the sentences too long. Like if you want to explain 'an individual checking someone's breathing' you could speak outright about it. You don't need to speak about how his fingers moved to where for the purpose of checking his breathing, as we all know how one checks someone's breathing. That's all. I said pros and cons for it. Hope the author aids my advice to further improving his novel in a way where more readers find this gem and read it together with him on this wonderful journey of adventure & chivalry of the protagonist to end the tyrany of the merciless God, Alpha B, one day.