Honestly, it's very well written, exciting and makes me want to read it honestly. The hero is not an idiot, but someone with the mind of a ruler and scientist.
Personally, I hope he will visit Warhammer one day :)
Hi, I'm writing an HP Fanfaction, it would help me a lot if you read it and comment what you think, you can find it on my profile or look for it as: Harry Potter: Narnia and the World Hidden in a Closet.