I thought how it progressed , turned out to be worse and worse in every chapter . And about bringing Lily to life for a deal with Snape is really ridiculous, just use mind reading techniques that have been there, why bother ". I knew that multiverse fanfics would only destroy the intended world, not explore the potential that exists and take advantage of it.
LazySageDao
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LIKEcant even see how snape could ever win her heart hes the reason voldimort killed her husband in the first place
Omnisiac:For those who read this retards review, so that you don’t misunderstand, this deal is indeed made but Lily is in no way compelled or forced to fall in love or enter a relationship with Snape which seems to be implied by the reviewer, up to the current update I am at in the story, Lily has been revived at somewhere around 5th year canon timeline I think, and the story has moved onto a canon/fanon-ically altered version of Harrys kids about to start school, and Snape is still trying to earn Lily’s heart.
I think your review kind of makes no sense, perhaps the author has a reason for bringing lily back to life and making a deal with Snape was the way they decided to go about it. Also, you said that the author hasn't explored the potential of the world, this is just completely wrong, there have been new ways of using magic, doing this through modifying spells that we already know to do different things, we have even seen new spells all together attained by the mc through travelling through the world. In conclusion, I think that you just don't like the story and that's fine, but don't make up excuses to justify that.
SitOnBread:Also, when your talking about mins reading techniques your acting as if Snape is not proficient in Legilimency, he would definitely know how to protect his own mind.
yes if you do not believe can read it. but I don't think you will haha. see someone else is talking in my review it's even funny
Yuukit:good that i read this, im skipping this
to make a bargaining chip and yes . just try to read it you will understand the meaning of disappointed reading hahaha, even though there are still many ways to squeeze snape as if "everyone is in a hurry", you see he can bring the dead back to life then then someone talks about mc not being able to oclumenci to snape funny isn't it? as if "reviving the dead is a trivial power that loses to oclumency
Daoist198784:He brought her back to life for Snape?
Zzz_808:to make a bargaining chip and yes . just try to read it you will understand the meaning of disappointed reading hahaha, even though there are still many ways to squeeze snape as if "everyone is in a hurry", you see he can bring the dead back to life then then someone talks about mc not being able to oclumenci to snape funny isn't it? as if "reviving the dead is a trivial power that loses to oclumency
The reason that he did not read Snape's mind is because Edward feared that the latter would use Occlumency to erase the knowledge in his memories. So, since Edward was already researching a way to revive his parents, he offered a deal to Snape. As for the consequences or relationship between Snape and Lily afterwards, this is not his problem.
the novel wa sprobably at 30 chaps when you wrote it thats the beginning of the beginning....you dont know if the MC has any future plans for Snape (snape owning him sntg for lily) or lily....also he i seen quite ruthless with how he does his research (even thinking about kidnapping tonks to study her bloodline)
the person who wrote the review is just an idiot who does not understand anything fanfic just started to develop properly and unleash the potential of the world and he says that fanfiction about multiverse spoils the original world when the very concept of the multiverse has not yet been fully explained in the fafnik itself
unknown_daoist:the novel wa sprobably at 30 chaps when you wrote it thats the beginning of the beginning....you dont know if the MC has any future plans for Snape (snape owning him sntg for lily) or lily....also he i seen quite ruthless with how he does his research (even thinking about kidnapping tonks to study her bloodline)
the person who wrote the review is just an idiot who does not understand anything fanfic just started to develop properly and unleash the potential of the world and he says that fanfiction about multiverse spoils the original world when the very concept of the multiverse has not yet been fully explained in the fafnik itself
Yuukit:good that i read this, im skipping this
Enormiity:Thanks for your objective review, you make me avoid wasting time with this fanfic. God if only every review is objective rather than just spamming 5*.
For those who read this retards review, so that you don’t misunderstand, this deal is indeed made but Lily is in no way compelled or forced to fall in love or enter a relationship with Snape which seems to be implied by the reviewer, up to the current update I am at in the story, Lily has been revived at somewhere around 5th year canon timeline I think, and the story has moved onto a canon/fanon-ically altered version of Harrys kids about to start school, and Snape is still trying to earn Lily’s heart.
why are you bothering to explain while many have read and agree, I'm not alluding to what you mentioned, but the way lily is used.
Omnisiac:For those who read this retards review, so that you don’t misunderstand, this deal is indeed made but Lily is in no way compelled or forced to fall in love or enter a relationship with Snape which seems to be implied by the reviewer, up to the current update I am at in the story, Lily has been revived at somewhere around 5th year canon timeline I think, and the story has moved onto a canon/fanon-ically altered version of Harrys kids about to start school, and Snape is still trying to earn Lily’s heart.
SitOnBread:Also, when your talking about mins reading techniques your acting as if Snape is not proficient in Legilimency, he would definitely know how to protect his own mind.
that makes no sense is stupid and something Snape would not do at all. only a moron would get rid of all the knowledge that is a million times more detailed than any prophecy made. your logic falls flat.
LazySageDao:The reason that he did not read Snape's mind is because Edward feared that the latter would use Occlumency to erase the knowledge in his memories. So, since Edward was already researching a way to revive his parents, he offered a deal to Snape. As for the consequences or relationship between Snape and Lily afterwards, this is not his problem.