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SelfProclaimedNerd
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2021-09-04 00:14

Honestly, it's not that bad. There are a few mistakes in grammar but you can still read the story regardless. It is a bit off-putting at times, but it is what it is. The way the MC reacts after being betrayed is questionable, but it makes the story move faster so it's not a big deal. Although the ML's actions are highly erratic, who even brings a person they just met into their house or office? Usually, these bosses will just call their subordinates and make them deal with the situation. It is a bit forced but it helps the story develop, so there's not much I can say. Overall, it was a good read. Keep it up!

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Moonyani
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I understand but if you read further, you will know why he did that xd

SelfProclaimedNerd
SelfProclaimedNerdLv4

I guess he knew the MC right? Maybe he already loves her. It usually goes like that. I'm a sucker for that type of stories so I'll be taking my time reading this. Even if it wasn't like that, I'm already curious.

Moonyani:I understand but if you read further, you will know why he did that xd
Moonyani
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Awh, That’s sweet. I’m very glad to onow you’re liking it ^^

SelfProclaimedNerd:I guess he knew the MC right? Maybe he already loves her. It usually goes like that. I'm a sucker for that type of stories so I'll be taking my time reading this. Even if it wasn't like that, I'm already curious.
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