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MrLollip0p
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2021-08-23 05:45

Author you have a nice story here and your own writing style but you need more refining to perfect it. Paragraphs are not balanced, consistent redundancy, sentence casing is of little importance to you, and your chapters are too short. Out of all this I think the major problem would be lack of valid description. To put it plainly: too little information is given so its hard to imagine the scene when I don't even know how the mc looks. Great story here ngl. Learning to write better is a process that every author that wants to be recognised for their work has to bleed through. Keep fighting! You've got this!

Bound to a spirit seal

Sky_Li
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Sky_Li
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Every little correction serves as a motivation for me. I'll make sure i do my best thanks for the review 😊😊

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This is treasure that I am quite giddy to find! The story is wonderful! Once you start reading, you wouldn't be able to put it down! It is loaded with mystery, excitement of battles and very funny episodes in between. The characters are unique.The ML is now my crush! So strong and powerful. The FL is my ideal lady. Fragile outside but diamond strong inside. Thanks for the story dear author! You are a winner in my list!

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CannibalTurtle
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This is definitely a hidden gem. I loved how the story flowed and the ML is also an interesting character himself. The writing quality is also superb and there's a uniqueness to it.

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Eshal_Shahnawaz
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Writing Quality: Needs improvement in grammar but overall readable. Stability of Updates: Pretty stable Story Development: Going perfect Character Design: Can't do better myself World Background: Great

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Jian_Rose
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I love the story dear author, I'm not a fan of reviews but I couldn't stop myself this time, your books are amazing, loving the ML and FL, you're doing a good job dear author, keep it up!😊😊

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CYPHER_OCTAGON
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awesome read though grammar is a bit erratic but it's still great a diamond in the rough if you will there's room for improvement and I'm sure the author will improve with time thanks for this great novel

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