ZoneTailLv53yr

2021-07-27 21:24

▪︎Writing Quality...............☆☆☆☆☆ - 5☆ for a good word count. ▪︎Story Development........☆☆○○○ - for now we have 12 chapters so far. Giving an early review to a ff with only 12 chapters, is not really recommended thing to do, but seeing how the story progress It feels like it's the right time to give it a review. - starting from the MC, the mc is one of the game developer of the game which is Yggdrasil. Before the game shuts down, he tried creating his own over the top character,(just for fun). (since he is one of the game developer he can do allot of things with no restrictions) in short he created godlike character. Just like ainz(momonga) he overstayed and endup being transported to a new world(isekai). chapter 1 was the • introduction of the character • show casting his looks stats and power. • and how he is coping with his situation (he also has one of those green effects that forced ainz to relax or to calm down). • lastly finding civilization which is carne village. + Now this is why I gave this ff 2☆ in S.D. - Early romance. (It's enri) The most obvious ship I have ever seen so far, you can already guess it by just reading the tittle in chapter 2. Enri in this ff is an orphan. She lost her mother from child birth, his father died by a monster attack and the little sister never existed(Sad noises). For a smoother and easy way to get a girl is by removing her family from the very start of the story ...(LOL). I know that the author doesn't want this romance to be force but introducing her so early on the story and getting them to a sexual level of relationship in just 2 to 4 chapters seems force. - the contents of the other chapters are mostly some small things like him helping Enri study small jobs like potion making, enri getting stalk by some mob character, mc and enri getting to know each other by exploring the mountains and forest splashing some white holy water, enri eating lollipop early in the morning small things. (Having those type of chapter is OK but its getting to frequent. It's like every other chapter their will be a banging moments). - And their will be no nazarick, no momonga (ainz), no guardians and mostly all the characters from overlord will be gone. Just the OCMC and Enri and some extras who originally from the current world. (Sad but interesting) ▪︎Character Design...........☆☆☆☆○ - Physical design is good - OP mc is good (it's fair since this is overlord) - Personality is a bit plain and ordinary ▪︎Updating Stability..........☆☆☆☆☆ ▪︎World Background.........☆☆☆☆☆

Overlord: The Game Master

Master_Vaders

4.7

17 Chs