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2022-04-04 22:38

Hey Author!! I do like the unoriginal style, incorporating many things to keep the story interesting. The Background is done very well, the character design and development is pretty good. i just felt like there could have been less info dumps and the info is spread evenly explaining as you go. It gets a bit boring reading the info and understanding it. *** I REALLY LIKE YOUR STORY AND IT'S THE TYPE I LIKE *** You could have made it a bit better getting to things slowly as you go. it was a good read over all and i found it hard to put down.... there were things that was hard to understand at the beginning such as ()the man who says |FOR BALANCE| ()random people just popping up ___ Every thing i said is just my opinion and you don't have to listen to it if you don't have to. I am not really good at writing reviews.... --- Overall GREAT JOB!!! Hope you SPICE it up in the coming chapters... SEE YA!!!

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