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Halo_Brother
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2021-08-21 14:44

I have to say so far as of chapter 9 very high quality and developed in terms of the characters so far. most interactions feel very realistic on how they played out and is something that, I think, everyone would really enjoy!

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Ashtrith
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Okayyy so this is my first 'proper' review for anything novel-related, sooo it might not be the most consistent/fleshed out. --might contain some spoilers! I tried to keep it low as possible.-- Some warnings (i hope it doesn't put anyone off its a unique/good read and worth your time) Mentions of suicide, sexual abuse, alcohol abuse, and some gore. (gender bend? I don't think it's repulsive or that there is something awful about it. But some people just hate it. - _ - ) romance?: yuri(girl x girl). look in the tags. loli?: yes. permanently?: IDK. system?: Well yes but actually no. (more like a stat window it doesn't have bullshixt features. like extra stat points or a pocket Walmart. You learned a skill? it displays it, you level up? it displays it, no mini-map or anything like that) {ok maybe some but there locked.} ~Stars~ < Writing Quality: 5 - why? Well if someone were to closely inspect it I'm sure that they, Could find some errors but for those who read fast, there are no major errors. It's nicely organized and the chapters are LONG {by Wn standards}. (the author also asked/stated that if someone pints out an error they will correct it) < Story Development: 5 - Ok so the prolog is kinda long but it is worth it. Jhon's (Violet)'s character and backstory is more than interesting, after the prolog, it slows down a bit but it seems to pick up the pace again. < Character Design: 5 - Violet (Mc). appearance wise: it's good, the cover closely resembles the description Personality-wise: cosmically insane, ex-military, alcoholic, suffers from PTSD, seemingly laid back, and a fun person to be around. But also suffers from a chronic case of cringe from time to time. {'superloli' still gets me sometimes} The side characters are also good, they feel like people. < Update Stability: 4 - Uhhhh idk. the author updated the chapters so the timers reset, The first chapter was last updated 8 months so that's when the novel started I guess. I don't have a large problem with it the author did tell us that he has a lot of things to take care of (including school?) + as I said, the chapters are LONG. As long it isn't dropped, take as much time as you need. < World Building: 4 - it's the transported to a game world trope (but not really. More like a world with game elements like Japanese/Korean light novels or manga). Not a lot has been established but it has care put into it and won't feel like 'it's just the background'. < closing thought? it's good 👍, I like that the mc isn't a 'person that can do no good', or the world has wronged me, or a fat guy sitting and crying in their room, or Chinese Giga chad no 420. (s)he knows that (s)he a murderer and (s)he should be accountable for that. here come the PTSD-like nightmares and flashbacks, aside from that romance part didn't show up and I don't think it will for some time, I personally enjoy/like yuri, so that's that. writing is hard (we'll if you want to make a good story that is) he made something enjoyable, hopefully, he made fun with it I sure know that I have. otherwise, I wouldn't have written this. bye bye! 👋

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