Item: The Legendary Daddy Merchant
Rating: 5
Author: Dee_author

Dee_authorLv113yr

2021-07-13 21:19

I love this book. It has a unique "system" storyline. The MC is already an interesting character right from the start. The author's grammar and creative writing skills are top-notch! He brings to life the active emotions of the characters, making the story relatable. I totally recommend this book to everyone! Great job author![img=recommend] You've got talent.

The Legendary Daddy Merchant

BlueBlueLemon

4.7

63 Chs

Liked by 1 people

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Mr_ImaginationLv2

What's unique with that system? It's literally the most hated type of system. Read daddy fantasy world restaurant, they have the same system Briane's one is just more useless and garbage.

3yr

Other Reviews

BlueBlueLemonAuthor

Author here! I like to thank to those who read Legendary Daddy Merchant and those who stick around. I'm going to say this in advance, but I am planning to make this a long term project so hopefully, I would be able to write a lot of chapters. That is why the story development is a bit slow. It's my way of coping up in real life because in every chapter I write, I at least feel a little accomplishment from it. However, slow it may be, I try to make the journey smooth and enjoyable. So feel free to vote and add it to your library.

3yr

Mr_ImaginationLv2

I love the story progression and I'm curious on what's going to happen next but the system and the slow pace irks me. The system is better off not having it's own consciousness because it's useless anyways. It's just annoying. I don't know what you are planning for giving the system consciousness but for now, it having a consciousness is just annoying and the most useless thing in the world.

3yr

kuhaku_soraLv3

Writing quality 4/5- The only problem that I could see is the tenses switches and the showing techniques. There are a lot of tenses mixed up, but not enough to disrupt me from reading the story. Stabilty of updates 5/5- Story development- It was really a nice flow. The events happening in the story is really entertaining, except for... the character design which I gave 4/5- I thin bryan needs to have a purpose of returning back to his daughter. Redeeming himself is one thing, but he has a family. That goal must be visible by the time he arrives in the world (and how he asks about the system) World background- I have touched the surface of the world. But I dont think this matters for now, since this book is about character developmetn ( I think) Kudos for the author!

3yr

Spectra134Lv14

honestly this is one of the best I have read in a while, the story is pretty good and it's just easy to ready and makes you wanna continue, I'm pretty sure anybody who gives this book a try would like it

3yr

Maryam_ZahoorLv1

Amazing story...The way you wrote synopsis is much unique than the way other writers introduce their story. Will love to get more and more chapters.

3yr

Lonewo1fLv3

A great read indeed. I liked the cover. It's simple yet very eye catching. The story's pace is good for now. I don't think it's rushing or have a slow pace. I saw some tenses off the bats here and there. As for grammar I didn't find any errors for now (maybe a few). Overall, a nice read.

3yr

ScourgieLv2

Just from the first chapter alone, it gives an amazing opening of the character's world, situation, and endings to chapters that leave you hooked! There are very minor grammatical issues but it doesn't take away from the story at all! I hope others reading this book can agree!

3yr

ThatguyrayLv3

I Swear. An amazing book which grammar checker do you use. there are hardly any mistakes. I love the story setting. Am definitely adding this to my library.

3yr

UragosLv11

It has a creative and interesting plot. The author has minor tense errors, but these are simple things and do not interfere with reading. You can feel the main character's emotions while reading. A novel with a unique system. You can try.

3yr

Yonko_masterLv2

The book has really great grammar, and the MC of the story is a really great character. I read the first 5 chapters and this story really has potential. Keel up the good work buddy and don't forget to always update frequently!😉

3yr

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