it's a good premise and I enjoy the story but the author keeps going on rants in the middle of the story, also keeps doing flashbacks or over explaining backstory like how he was a Heartbreaker or was the protag of his world apparently

great potential, however your execution isn't great. its a weird story, as most of it is just random facts about the mc that does not really contribute to his character development, world back building is fragmented as it is always interrupted with random facts about the mc. while the writing quality of the fic is low, not because of grammar issue or spelling issue, but because it is mostly rants, random mc facts and a little bit about the story. you should work on the structure of each chapter and focus more on the plot, character development and world building. pretty sure that if you gain a bit more experience in writing you would have done this fic better, so as you learn more, gain more exp and become a better writer you should go back and fix the early chapters

I started reading it because of the last line in the synopsis. There are only few chapters at the time. But it has potential and I hope author could tap into it.

There is just one word to describe this story: wierd. there is absolutely no flow in here. everything a confusing mess. some things are kinda funny but most of the time im just confused. pure Chaos