Review Detail of YOURS_TRULY in Iron Blood
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A story with a very good premise and character's, but there is no world building and character introduction. the world and it's characters are dumped at you from the start with no care for the pacing of the story, and the power imbalance is a major issue ##spoiler## The MC at rank 1 can sense when his father peek's at him when he's rank 8?? And MC getting immortal rank enemies when he's rank 1???### so it's a good story that's needs more fleshing out for the world and character's. good luck with your work author!!
Iron Blood
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Thanks for the review. As the novel progresses, there will be a more detailed description of the world itself because right now most of the story is told from the MC’s perspective. As for how the MC could notice, I’ve already explained that his parents always suppress their powers, they don’t need to hide themselves when checking up on their children. The father could naturally prevent Cain from noticing but he doesn’t. The mc does not have immortal enemies right now, only his family does. They simply wouldn’t care about the existence of such a weakling. I will take your advice and work on the character introductions more. Thanks again.