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2021-07-04 23:46

Mr.Brutal here and note this are just my opinions : - OMG! This dude got it. - There are little freckles of punctuations and even littler(I like to use this word) grammatical errors but the writing quality is epic. - Only 3 chaps in but I'm affixed because Dialogues are decent, rare in the case of webnovel works and The speaker of said dialogues holds true to their characters.. like the commanding father ofcourse. - The novel needs more dynamic word constructions, more emotion in paragraphs, don't go lazy on me and your future fans, we expect much from you. - Author's a newbie? Like me... but he got it down and down further the road, this work will be among the front recommended one(s) if the author keeps up his passion. - Worth a read and if updates are hyper, worth to pay every cent of a dime for.

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Thank you very much, will put your advice to heart especially concerning more emotions in paragraphs. Appreciate your honesty.

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