Review Detail of AreeSensei in The Starry Death Swordsman

There is a lot to say about this book. A lot of problems too. The author knows how to write dialogues and created compelling characters, but descriptions are cruelly lacking. There is also a lot of repeated text, problems with verb tenses, etc. Some of these issues can be explained by English not being the author's first language. I would advise writing first in your native language and then translating since you'll have more vocabulary choices in your native language; and be more at ease with what you're trying to tell. However, the writing is somewhat lacking content. It's a bit too fast, and quickly overlooks any detail. It's too "light". There is also some 'parasitic text', like author's notes put with the story itself, and "this is picture of mom", etc. That can be solved pretty quickly though, by editing said chapters. I think the author needs to work on his general storytelling, be it the pacing, the depiction of the environment, or properly shifting points of view. Though, the author already writes good dialogues, so give it a chance, as well as some advices, to help the author improve!