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26starsLv123yr
2021-07-13 19:45

Hello! First of all, I want to appreciate the author for writing a book with a fresh idea like this 😍 Then, I will start my review... The cover is cute, but the font is not suitable for the title, I think. Make the title look bigger and if it is possible, make the characters look bigger as well 🤔 Then, the synopsis. I suggest the author make an edit with the synopsis. I think it will be better to let the readers know what's in the story rather than just write down some cuts of the dialogues. For example, introduce the characters a little, then write a little about the storyline. If the author can show an interesting idea in the synopsis, I think it can attract more readers. In terms of writing, I found some misspell issues. Not fatal, but I believe that the author can do better after proofreading it again 😁 Other than that, I found some ambiguous sentences because of the lack of punctuation marks and also the punctuation marks misplaced. But, I enjoyed this story, overall. The author is so good at describing the situation. It feels so realistic and not too much. The idea of this story is also intriguing. It's worth praising. Thank you for your hard work, author-nim [img=recommend]

Meeting you was Unavoidable(BL)

Bird_Of_Paradise
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Bird_Of_Paradise
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Your review surely helped me see lots of my shortcomings and i have done my best to try overcome some...I will make sure to keep your words noted..

3yr
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26starsLv12

Good luck! 😊

Bird_Of_Paradise:Your review surely helped me see lots of my shortcomings and i have done my best to try overcome some...I will make sure to keep your words noted..
3yr
26stars
26starsLv12

I forgot to add your book to my library, but I've done it now, lol~ I like your new cover! 😍

Bird_Of_Paradise:Your review surely helped me see lots of my shortcomings and i have done my best to try overcome some...I will make sure to keep your words noted..
3yr
Bird_Of_Paradise
Bird_Of_ParadiseAuthor

I editing it for one hour lol..(Facepalmlaugh insert emoji)😂😂 But thank you for your suggestions...I appreciate them..

26stars:I forgot to add your book to my library, but I've done it now, lol~ I like your new cover! 😍
3yr
26stars
26starsLv12

Oh, but the title on the cover is a bit difficult to read. If you need my help with the cover, you can always reach me on Discord (it's free, lol). I'm not a real artist, but I like to edit pics 😊

Bird_Of_Paradise:I editing it for one hour lol..(Facepalmlaugh insert emoji)😂😂 But thank you for your suggestions...I appreciate them..
3yr
Bird_Of_Paradise
Bird_Of_ParadiseAuthor

Imma coming to you right away....

26stars:Oh, but the title on the cover is a bit difficult to read. If you need my help with the cover, you can always reach me on Discord (it's free, lol). I'm not a real artist, but I like to edit pics 😊
3yr
1
26stars
26starsLv12

😂

Bird_Of_Paradise:Imma coming to you right away....
3yr
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angel_el
angel_elLv2

I am going to give full 5 stars for the sake of hardwork she had put into this.. THe story is about magic and phantasy but even more about love between boys which is probably the bestest thing in the world... That aside, I love how beautiful the cover is and the interesting story line.

3yr

Levi_Chan123
Levi_Chan123Lv2

So when i read synopsis the story felt normal..the prologue was not what i expected then the chs following were even better like it is a good read till now.

3yr
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