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evilmunky45
evilmunky45Lv123yr
2021-08-17 08:44

So far, I like the concept very much, but I admit there are a few critiques I have with the writing, but nothing major. The biggest offender is the use of emojis. In dialogue they are unnecessary and takes away from it, I don't mind it when you use them for the system "display", for example the lock emotes, as it makes sense but during dialogue it really takes away from the immersion. One thing you should go back and look at are your titles, though, you got a lot of misprint titles, like "Chapter 5: Chapter 5:" as an example, other than that I really like the world you built, the mythological lore you've fused, and the personality of the characters are great as well. Please continue writing! It has great potential!

My Blessed Psychic System

A_lucid_Dreamer
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46 Chs

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Thank you for your honest review. I’ll definitely fix definitely fix fhe chapters and The Newest chapters dont haVe any emoJis 😅

3yr
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Authur review: In the begining you wont Know a lot about the main characters past but the longer you read the more it will be revealed. There is some romance but just enough not to be overbearing. Power progression can Make sense most of The Time. Also if your not Use to reading slang You might struggle at first but i promise it will make more sense once you get Use to It. Some chapters will be short due It beinG the introduction oR me it mIght be me just being lazy. Tell me what yall think leave a comment.

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The overall concept of the story is nice. the way the characters are introduced is rather exceptional. P.s. Wish you good luck on winning at the Spirity Awards!!!

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SabergKeys
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It's a unique story and experience, and written really good. This was the first time I saw something like this so I was amazed by everything you wrote.

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Cyclxne
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Overall a pretty unique concept for a story, which kind of combines cultivation, system, fantasy, and stuff you would see from a demon king anime or something lol. Only thing I'd like to point out is the writing quality... using Grammarly or something would be nice, since right now there are quite a few errors even in the synopsis alone. Other than this though, really solid novel. 4.5/5!

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This novel has an entirely new concept and is definitely interesting. The spelling and grammatical mistakes need some working and what's up with a☺??? But it is very refreshing to read this story, but it left me a bit sad that Medusa was already married. Overall content and setting is very good. keep up the good work

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hard finding spiritual stories with action in them, I'm glad i came across this, the cover could do more work, the kinda novel that lets you believe in magic, the world build is done quite well, the pace is a little slow towards the end but I'm looking forward to read more because the topic is of great depth! POWER STONE, WORTH IT HAH!

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Hey author it took me little longer but I found it very interesting to read , I'm still reading ,it looked completely different to me , well done.. keep updating.

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