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Not_A_Nenuphar
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2021-07-06 11:56

The mc thoughts are all over the place, coupled with an extremely fast passed monologue. It does not let you get acclimated to the story, instead it forces you to continue reading to try and make sense of it, its definitely a good Idea but the quality of writing isn't up to it, still, good luck with your novel author even if it's like this right now, experience is something you'll get with time, I'll continue reading to see future progress.

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I thank you for pointing that out, I don't like making my chapter to long so I'll try find the balance of too long and good quality

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