Review Detail of yohananmikhael in I Became a System
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Hi... I'm kind of frustrated at the moment from reading all the comments. Even though they are not rude, it still hit me since I didn't meet the readers' expectations. And as for that, please forgive me. I will still produce the best quality I could offer. This review isn't about me showing or wanting some pity. I want to the readers know that even I can't be the best writer, I'll be the most understanding writer. I'm taking all of the suggestions and reading plenty of light novels if I have time to widen my horizon, thus, I just want people to understand my concerns. This novel isn't usually a type of fantasy novel that is common or a trope that is repetitively used in the platform. I took a risk to implement such a trope so hope you appreciate it even it's not in the best of you could expect. These all I felt is something I understand. Normally, you won't receive praises every time and criticism will try to hit your shortcomings. It's helpful, I know it, however, I still can't help but feel anxious every time I see a number in my inbox (you know what I'm saying). So, instead of blabbering about my sentiments, I want to let people know that I am still an amateur. I didn't have any training or so, that's why I am still in the process of improving my work. I do mistakes. It's pretty common to me since I'm not a native English speaker (even those who are native speakers still make mistakes as 'no one is perfect'). What are my mistakes in this novel? Misused adjectives and adverbs. It's not common and at least you could stumble upon those funny mistakes like 2 out of 10 chapters and 3 in a thousand. But here's a reminder, pronouns are my weakness and sometimes I can't notice such mistakes. My language doesn't have pronouns for genders so hope you understand. Warning, incorrect spelling (but rare than legendary swords). I must let you know that my language doesn't have hard spellings as our words are spelled by how we speak them. Anyway, thank you for visiting and reading this review of mine. Last warning... Awkward structure but not all are grammatically incorrect.
I Became a System
yohananmikhael
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shashank_panthri:I will give it a try but still just a question, and I know this is kind of silly but are you planning any sort of romance for the guy in the system or maybe the girl that has the system? Can you tell me that if it doesn't spoil anything?
yohananmikhael:there will be romance in the future but it won't spoil things
shashank_panthri:the guy or the girl? Can you tell that without spoiling anything big?
[spoiler] read at your own risk some might misread or misunderstood Ellena's decision in chapter 25. Amber was like a representative for Lumbert's family (main) to recruit Ellena. And Ellena accepted it. because of it, a question arose. why would she join the family that made her suffer? just for education and financial support? - she did accept Amber's offer since the branch of the family she came from wasn't affiliated with Ellena's sufferings. indeed. there are two Lumbert families. one is the count which is the main, and another one is the baron which Ellena came from. so... it was an advantage for Ellena to join them since she was still weak and needed support. she can't do vigilante work every time just to grow stronger. it won't be really beneficial since she'll just raise her points in that way. she still needs training which she can get if she joins. basically, it doesn't mean that she is op at the start since both Ellena and Aaron are still unknowledgeable of some things. -note that there are risks in every opportunity. and she didn't join the family that made her suffer.
you should explain that in the chapter and not here in the comments. Most people will miss this and just drop the story because of a misunderstanding.
yohananmikhael:[spoiler] read at your own risk some might misread or misunderstood Ellena's decision in chapter 25. Amber was like a representative for Lumbert's family (main) to recruit Ellena. And Ellena accepted it. because of it, a question arose. why would she join the family that made her suffer? just for education and financial support? - she did accept Amber's offer since the branch of the family she came from wasn't affiliated with Ellena's sufferings. indeed. there are two Lumbert families. one is the count which is the main, and another one is the baron which Ellena came from. so... it was an advantage for Ellena to join them since she was still weak and needed support. she can't do vigilante work every time just to grow stronger. it won't be really beneficial since she'll just raise her points in that way. she still needs training which she can get if she joins. basically, it doesn't mean that she is op at the start since both Ellena and Aaron are still unknowledgeable of some things. -note that there are risks in every opportunity. and she didn't join the family that made her suffer.
shashank_panthri:you should explain that in the chapter and not here in the comments. Most people will miss this and just drop the story because of a misunderstanding.
CelestialAlcoholic:iâll give a try as well! Dont be discouraged :)
Avery_Gerstner:hello haven't read yet but in my personal opinion mistakes made make me smile because I know I'm not alone in this know matter what there is always someone having the same problem and Like to talk to these fellow people and help each other not everyone has this outlook but it is mine
I_LOVE_MEGUMIN:Will the system user be the love interest or will there be no romance???
Alrg you donât need to answer my first question anymore cause I just gave your novel the 10 capter test and even though it wasnât bad, I honestly just donât like your "type" of novel so it isnât your fault or the storys fault for being bad but rather tgat I just donât like the genere from your novel. But I checked iut your other novels and I think Iâm gonna read the "Sage in a cultivation world" as it interests me. But keep going and donât let others discourage you from writing this novel as long as you like it yourself everything would be okay đ
