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RainySand
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2021-07-16 07:44

It's good better than others but starts to dip off for me halfway into the novel Ah yin and MC's dialogue feels weird to me Author has trouble deciding the direction of the story and how to keep the mc balanced. An example would be the war games arc I'm sure author put it there because he didn't want the trait to get too busted and was running out ideas.

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I have read until chapter 86 and I'm just a normal reader so this is just my view : first thing first I like the interaction between Ja Sun(MC) and Other characters be it his friend(to be ) or teacher and enemies, secondly the story also flow smoothly with additional jokes that make me laugh for a minute or two, the pace of the story is quite good for me not too fast not too slow, the author keep answering my questions if there's something that I forgot from Douluo Dalu's novels so I don't have to reread Douluo Dalu to know some details. the side characters development is quite splendid, ah.. as a warning this is an AU so their personalities is not quite the same, but I think this is ok, since this story starts a decade before Canon, and we don't know how the original characters(like people from spirit hall, or Tang clan, etc) from Soul Land 1 behave a decade before Canon, so for me I like it, it gives more personality and characters development since MC enter their live. as for something that quite a put off happen the earliest to middle chapters is about MC that didn't kill his enemies, or refrain from killing his enemies if there's no immediate benefit from his Traits or something else, MC is not someone that keep killing his enemies like usual Chinese MC to cut the root, but you could read Author's Notes in synopsis about that as it concerning MC's background from previous live and his dislike that he said in earliest chapter, there will be a little flash back that will explaining about that later so just read until 80 chapter I promise that you will get Hooked.

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