Review Detail of US_DreamerDon in Empty promises:HOPE

Ok. This novel invites confusion from the first paragraph, where there is no line breaks in between everyone talking. This seems to be somewhat fixed at chapter 3, but the author might go back into the starting chapters and fix those. I would suggest to the Author to separate each individual line of dialogue into their own paragraph. Such as: "A talking." "B talking." Also I would suggest to commit to one POV.