Review Detail of MrSheta in Marvel Savitar psycho
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Interesting story, but for the most sacred thing, it changes the way of doing the dialogues and paragraphs for God, I don't know when it's the thoughts, when it's speaking or when it's narrating an event, even the paragraphs are poorly designed... It improves on that and the reader's experience will be greatly increased. As simple as doing: "for when they speak". (for when it is a thought). And write the paragraphs well, that they are not so long... Another thing is to explain the skills of the MC well, which is quite a confusion, because I thought it was going to be Dr. Fate, but apparently it is not.
Marvel Savitar psycho
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This comment is an update to the previous comment. The form of the dialogs has been somewhat improved, but it can still be improved, since the author does not know where to put the single quotes, double quotes and the parentheses for the different parts. It also confuses the reader a lot about the mc's first person narrative thoughts with the third person narratives, and also the thoughts of the other characters. The thoughts and dialogues are arranged in such a way that it is a kind of fusion of description and dialogue, description and thoughts, sometimes thoughts and dialogue. I hope that the author can improve these things, because in this way he will improve a lot as an author when writing and as a reader to read.