Hey author I reaLly think your book Has potential and thank you for the update. Just please i bef of you dont make it into a power fantasy. A slow burn would be nice like if you got into the politics of the ninja world and focused on the aspects of being a ninja. like you dont need to do continuous tImeskips and thinGs like that later on if you focus on the characters and their mindsets. Furthermore just a personal preference but it would be cool if Shika was more into genjutsu which would suit his shadows and assasination bias. Like at first he could learn genjutsu that mess with the opponents hearing making them think hes behing them the catch them with the shadow Possession. Little things like that could bolster fights a large degree because we’be all seen the typical power fantasy and this could be something different. TLDR: the story is good but the Author needs to focus on a plot such as danzo wanting shikamaru for root but Shika trying his best to avoid him. Because danzo has nija everywhere so hes definitely keeping an eye on the Young clan members. There should also be more stakes to keep the reader invested instead of contantly just telling us what hes doing for training.
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Thx for the good review
