Review Detail of The_ParadoX in Distarter of Astral

Alright Let's Begin, 1.Writing quality is bad.It's hard to understand what's going on due time skips and grammatical errors. 2.Story development so far is good. 3.Character design.... how should I put this it is good and bad at the same time(What am I even writing LOL...) 4.Yup, world background is pretty good. The story has potential if executed correctly dude focus on grammatical errors(They Suck) That's all BEST OF LUCK