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ShovelingKnight
ShovelingKnightLv103yr
2021-11-30 00:45

The writing is good and the story has a lot of potentials. It is interesting how novel to say... I really like the pacing. A little tip that just might help. Try to write smaller and more concise paragraphs. This will help the reader not to get lost as he or she reads your texts.

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Unknownking
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This will be an honest review. Even though this novel is quite good, and I would recommend it to writers and readers alike, it fails, in my opinion, as a web novel. Some might ask: Why does it still get such a high review? Because when I look at the writing quality and the World Background alone, this book is unrivaled. The author uses a variety of vocabulary and describes scenes vividly. As many people already pointed out, this book is for people that want to read something of quality (and I wouldn't recommend it to my 12-year-old brother or anyone that wants to read a harem/cultivator/system novel reader. They would be overwhelmed). But there also lies the problem. A reader that wants to read something of quality normally doesn't read a webnovel… They'll grab one of Stephen king's books or read The Lord of the Rings. Web novels are known for the fact they're easy to read for anyone that knows English even if they aren't well versed. But this novel has a high entry point, to be honest. The use of a variety of vocabulary, and phrases that can be as long as an entire paragraph, makes it difficult for some readers who are not proficient in English to read the text. Combine the things I said earlier with the fact that some paragraphs are way too big, and one can easily get a headache from reading it. (This can be easily solved in spacing the sentences and shorting some of the paragraphs) As an author, this book is one of the few books I will be using as a guide to improve the quality of my chapters. XD Only time will tell if there is a niche for readers of such kinds of web novels, and I hope it will succeed.

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