Review Detail of Jo_J in [BL] Ten Faced Boyfriend

First of all, we are here to learn and improve our skills and talents... it takes hard work, but is worth it. I keep my fingers crossed so that you, and people, who just start their journey with writing won't get discouraged. So... Don't worry so much about errors, we make them all, you can always correct them. From the very beginning of the story, the reader can feel that you have a concept for your book. The synopsis is intriguing. For me, a very conservative reader is annoying to see that you are jumping from one POV to another. The story would be a lovely one if you would write it in the 3 rd person's POV. Think abou it.