Review Detail of NimtheWriter in Ending the Immortal Era!

Hi! Honest shameless self review here! This is a personal small project that I'm working on to improve my English writing skills for my studies. The story is a bit slow towards the beginning but I promise you it'll get exiting very soon. As for characters I'm just recently getting the hand of writing them so I'll improve with time. Also I'll try to upload long chapters as I personally am not a fan of short chapters but I'll never go above 2000 words! Old chapters will be continually reworked on in order to make them at least readable lol. So if you have time please don't hesitate to point out the mistakes, I'll correct them later on.