Review Detail of Saviour_Ibok_9332 in AEGIS

The plot is interesting though these are a few points you could improve on. The setting/world background is very unclear. Is it a futuristic setting or ancient? You use technology and also horse riders which symbolises ancient times. If this novel is 800 years into the future then we should have amazing technology even with the chaos of the old world ending. The characters are not distinct and seem to have the same time and NO motivation. We also don't get a clear idea of who the MC is. Characters aren't well designed and the scene jumps are jarring. You should write scene by scene or use a scene break appropriately. You could use some proofreading before publishing to avoid grammar errors. Also, the plot doesn't satisfy the promise of relics. We don't see the rules of the magic system and it's shady. Good job nonetheless.