Review Detail of ZYZ in My New Life in TBATE

I don’t understand this review, but i hope you enjoy the read.

he means that your mc is gonna be "friends" with Art or become his follower, like every other TBATE fanfic. If you tell me he won't be friends with Art then I'll happily read, but before i read tell me please wether or not your mc is going to be friends/hang around Art?

Thats what i dont understand. Arthur is the MC of course hes going to be in the story as he fights all the main bad guys. Do you want an OP MC that just beats all the people Arthur is supposed to beat? Then everyone complains that MC is second Arthur. MC will definitely fight side by side with Arthur as the story goes on, but its not like they will be attached at the hip. So far 11 chaps and no Arthur. TLDR: MC will be interacting with Arthur. why wouldnt he?

cause it's a fanfic with an ooc people don't want to read about Art if they did they'd read the original, as for why not interact with Art let me introduce you to something called originality.

I know you mean like an MHA fanfic where the main story takes place around Midoriya which is difficult for fanfic writers to develop because of the MHA theme. I'm not against your MC interacting with Art and even making friends, BUT if the MC is going to help defeat all of Art's enemies it will look like Art's guard dog or a tool used to achieve ART's goals. You can get the MC to help Art BUT hope the MC will benefit or ask Art to do something in the future. Not everything in the world is FREE. Also does MC have a purpose in this second life? English is not my first language. so sorry if it sounds harsh.

yes, even if the MC doesn't help Art he has plot armor. So make the MC have his own goals.

what I mean is that the mc is gonna help art defeat his enemies and joins his journey for example let say a one piece ff but the mc follow luffy and the straw hats everywhere helping them that's just gonna be cannon but the mc there no one wants to read that and this is the vibe I'm getting from this book what I want to see is the mc own adventure and his own friends not art adventure or friends the mc can be friends with art and help cause that's what friends do but I hope to see the mc story not art's story

I honestly can’t say one way or another because even i don’t know that current moment. But how i vizualize it in my head is MC is placed on the same pedastals as the Lances and Arthur. So during the war he’s going to be sent on his own missions, but theres also going to be times he gets sent with other lances or even Arthur. I think ill have MC go with Arthur and Jasmine on their adventure, but like ive said i really dont know as i just write as it comes to me. But MC will have his own adventurer journey between at least 5-8. This is just really hard to say whether MC will or will not be around arthur in the way you dont want him to because as ive come to find out a lot of things are not explained in the books. We don’t know all the mana beasts, where is the kings castle located, who are the other nobles. How are bonds formed, how are deviances acquired. we really only here about one ciy in the novel. I will do my best to keep your thoughts in mind, i just figured people would read a TBATE ff for the MC interactions with Arthur. If its any consolation, the love interest is already revealed to be Kathyln

Personally the way ive always written my FFs is what i would want to happen or what i would do. Meaning i would befriend the main characters from the story. But i have learned people dont want to read the same story just with another added dialogue or another added fight scene, which i understand. However i also hate creating completely new enemies or more OC characters. I enjoy the MC is acquaintances or even friends with the OG characters, but he just doesn’t stay in their party or whatever if that makes sense. I just don’t want every interaction with Arthur to be a balancing act of “Oh this just going to be another helper FF” because yes, there will be times where MC helps Arthur as thats the nature of the story. MC will attend the academy at the same time as (maybe not enroll at the exact same time, but still attend) I hope this gives at least a vague idea of what you can expect from the story, but i can’t promise no Arthur, and i can’t say if he will always be around Arthur.

Thanks for making Kathlyn a love interest, she's a good woman.

Exactly, these people complain about us not changing the plot very much when they have no real idea how hard it can be to make arcs different to the original books and any famous series/anime. Doubly so when the base series in incomplete and we do not know much about a lot of things. Yeah sure, only adding an oc and making him do whatever Arthur does comes out as bland so a few differences in between, maybe even a major one, does help, along with original arcs revolving around the oc. You have more versatility in that, unlike us older tbate ff writers who have inserted their oc as a twin brother to Arthur, you could do completely different arcs with free rein. Looking forward to this fics take on future arcs.

It's true that we plebs have no idea about how hard it is to write such books but let me tell you just one secret, books that don't change the plot much or are just rides along the MC from the prospective of an OC character the author made up to suck up to said MC are BORING and you'd be better of not writing them in the first place!! Kabom mind-blown am I right?? What a revelation!

Guess what? I did mention such a book would be bland, if only you had read my message properly. And have you even read his book? So far all he has is original arcs, like the mc hasn't even met Arthur, and yet people call the mc his 'lap dog' Like dude if I was ever transmigrated/reborn in any world I'm familiar with, I'd make sure to stay with the mc and become a good friend since all I know about that world are events around him and I'd much rather face things I already know is gonna happen than go on a completely different route and quite possibly screw up and die once again.

Of course you'd do that to survive, but I'm judging the entertainment value here, and that's a kind of tale nobody would want to bother knowing, the whole point is that once you are already going through the trouble of sitting down and write a whole book about it, there's literally no reason for your MC not to be the centerpiece of it. I came here to find out what the acronym in the title was and casually saw a few reviews arguing about being a side character so since I'm quite opinionated on the matter I just jumped on the wagon, anyway I'm glad to hear that this author knows how to write original plots, but that would just be even sadder if his MC won't end up being the strongest and most influent character in his book by the end of it. In the simplest terms that I could put it, I just do not see any value in a fanficion that does not try at least a bit to depict the MC as the best thing since hot water and sliced bread, as simple as that. You can write other genres for those depressing reads.

to further reiterate what aizen said, in the naruto fanfiction website, the top favourites are dominated by ocs. Yes i know its hard to change to all ocs but its a MUST for there to be some ocs for in a fanfic or its trash

with the oc always around arthur, this story will lack the world building necessity. this also shows that you are not the most competent author due to the fact oc is around arthur. no competent author would willingly destroy their story like that

as your story lacks extensive world building(world building on top of the original author ) nor many ocs, being very honest, your story may be decent but not be good

i really hate op mc but i hate lack of world building more

1) You do realize what you're saying right? What you're saying is basically screw the timeline, screw the lore, make an entirely new story with ocs everywhere and make Arthur a side character. 2) Have you even read his story? The oc hasn't even met Arthur for gods sake, and its been 34 chapters, and I'd reckon around 80k words.

1) um yes? a fanfic requires changes , if not might as well read the original book? i dont see the argument to this point. if a author only adds one character to a fanfic, thats not a fanfic, thats called plagiarism. 2) ye i have not read the book, i judged solely based on the premise of the book