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Preston_Murphy
Preston_MurphyLv153yr
2021-07-29 13:14

I love the world that's been developing, and all the characters involved. in terms of close plot think of Mulan. my only problem at this point 32 chapters in is the MC has no agency, she has no reason to be doing what she's doing aside from plot demands it. that being said her struggle is real, she has no easy button aside from the fact that she's fast.

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Sheefta_Naz
Sheefta_NazLv4

Thank you so much for your review. I will work on this. I really appreciate this. <3

Preston_Murphy
Preston_MurphyLv15

your welcome 🙂

Sheefta_Naz:Thank you so much for your review. I will work on this. I really appreciate this. <3
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Tiphereth
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It looks like webnovel auto hides reviews with bad language in it? Had to change some stuff before it registered Hey author. Sorry if this seems like a scathing review. Seems? No, it is. This novel is so terr1ble, I wonder just how many review swaps you had to go through in order to get this rating. If you didn't do any review swaps, then congratulations, because this novel is so bad that you would have just done the impossible Writing Quality: 2 stars. Each paragraph is over ten sentences long. Sentence flow is nonexistent. Cohesive dialogue? Never heard of it. There were several instances in a single chapter where the sentence count of a paragraph easily reached the thirties, sometimes even forties, in one huge infodump or the other. 2 stars Stability of Updates: 2 stars. Don't get me wrong, the updates are consistent. Which is why I gave it two stars instead of one. This author piles ten chapters on the reader, every sixteen days. Imagine you, a reader, getting an update for this novel. You've forgotten the plot. You've forgotten the characters. You've moved onto other novels in your life. You don't want to experience reading through ten tedious chapters, sift through all the story pieces the author brings back in their terr1ble chapters. For more information on 'terr1ble', see the writing quality star rating. 2 stars for both. Story Development: See if I care. You tell me. Try to read at least ten chapters of it. I'll pay you ten bucks to summarize the story for me. Tell me how much of your life you spent trying to decipher the author's page of infodump. Character Design: 3 stars. Generic Medieval plot, hiding under a pretense of originality. But I don't have time to play house with it. World Background: 2 stars. Infodump. Infodump. Infodump. Infodump. Infodump. Infodump. Infodump. Infodump. Infodump. Did I ever tell you that some sentences are over thirty sentences long? This novel's world, no, *any* novel's world isn't interesting enough for a reader to sit through a thirty sentence paragraph explaining the rinky-dink politics and intricacies of the world. Before I get ripped a new one in the comments, I suggest this: Read it yourself. Whether you are the author or a reader, just read the novel. Get to chapter five, and take this quiz. What is the plot? Describe the characters. How fun was your read? It doesn't matter if you can do the first two. The answer to the last one is no. And author, don't bother deleting this review.

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