There were generally more grammar errors that could hinder the pace of reading and understanding. Author could go back and do some editing, especially the gender pronouns (girl=she, her hers)( boy=he, him, his). The story is nice and the characters are well made. The storyline is unique and has a lot of potential about friends and family.
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thank you for review and suggest, csn you show me, where the mistakes? I have revised she and he, because the translator application made a lots of mistakes,which she become he, he become she :)
I did see that you fixed most of the pronoun mistakes, but for best results don't use the translator application. Even with your limited English, you have to go back and re-read all the chapters yourself so you can see all the pronouns and correct it (she, her hers, he, him his).
Vienna_Gu:thank you for review and suggest, csn you show me, where the mistakes? I have revised she and he, because the translator application made a lots of mistakes,which she become he, he become she :)
surely, i will re-read my book and revise my mistakes. thank you for suggestion 🙂🙏
Just_Scissors:I did see that you fixed most of the pronoun mistakes, but for best results don't use the translator application. Even with your limited English, you have to go back and re-read all the chapters yourself so you can see all the pronouns and correct it (she, her hers, he, him his).
