Review Detail of Seishi_ in Aristocrat to Adventurer

If I'll be brutally honest here, well, I can't say anything wrong on the story itself as it was on your style. However, as I read, some spaces are double spaced. Also, there are some unnecessary symbols like "—" and "," where you could just end it with a "." I just found your Punctuation Marks Usage as wrong here. Anyway, the story is still good. Keep it up and not the wrong usages.