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first of all, I love your book cover since Fubuki from one punch man is there. She is my waifu so, points for you hahaha joke. Next, the title... I thought it would be horror but it's like a mystery novel. The synopsis is great, it's really interesting, this is pretty interesting and good but in the chapters, you used *smile* instead of using the " *smiles* " You can just use, "She started smiling," "She smiled" or anything that it could describe that person smiling. There is still a lot more to improve but that is part of life and you have potential. Keep writing!

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Ghost Busters

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Hey! First of all, thanks a lot for reading my work. And yes, I do agree with you. Those were the initial chapters and that time, it appeared okay to me but now seeing it again really made me to change that. As there's a saying~ You improve as time passes. Keep supporting!! 🙌🙌

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No bro haha~ This work contains intense horror and not to be executed activities. Since, this is in its initial stage, the theme is light hearted for now. Eventually, it will get intense. And, also there are ghosts in this. You can go through tags for more info.