first of all, I love your book cover since Fubuki from one punch man is there. She is my waifu so, points for you hahaha joke. Next, the title... I thought it would be horror but it's like a mystery novel. The synopsis is great, it's really interesting, this is pretty interesting and good but in the chapters, you used *smile* instead of using the " *smiles* " You can just use, "She started smiling," "She smiled" or anything that it could describe that person smiling. There is still a lot more to improve but that is part of life and you have potential. Keep writing!
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