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2023-03-25 12:32

I've been reading up until chapter twenty or so. I really like the beginning of the story, it feels very clear in direction. Elena is an intriguing character and it's interesting to see into her life and what happens to her body and consciousness. Transmigration/reincarnation is not a new concept but I like the way you focused on a Russian character becoming a Chinese character. However, I started getting quite confused with all the different place and time skips, and I think when you go through editing you can think from the reader's perspective too. As of now, I think the story needs more work on characterization and story development. I want to be able to focus more on Elena's character but there are a lot of setting and time skips. Overall, enjoying the story and I like Elena's interactions with different characters. The slap chapter tho hahaha

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Thank you for your advice, I will look into it more to make the necessary changes. Being a first-time writer, I may not have written it the way I would like it to look. But with your encouragement, I will dwell more into them.

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