Review Detail of kathleenneko in I tried to kill a computer mouse

The title was intriguing and it made me curious about what this story will be. The synopsis catches my attention the same way the title captivates me. The plot was unique. But, editing is needed here and there, for example the proper punctuation and capitalization and the grammar looks fine for me the same as the pacing of the story. Also, the description at the beginning was good but, too much information was given at the very beginning which might be a problem. It's fine to give informations but, it should be lessen, since other information regarding the story can be shown in a different way other than the description/narration. Just like what the other authors/editors/coaches always say "Show don't Tell". But other than that the Author did a good job! Good luck and I'm looking forward for the rest of the chapters and on how will Mia's story unfolds as the story goes.