i find that this book has a lot of potential, but i find 3 major problems, 1 the chapters are extremely short, that combined with the lack of imagery, or character building leaves alot to be desired from the characters at the beginning. 2 the story so far is confusing with how its written, the events that transpire are so abrupt and sudden the reader doesnt have a clue about what happened. 3 the way the book transitions from paragraph to paragraph, event to event, ate very choppy and lacks a flow of cohesiveness. there is a lack of diversity in words, i.e. instead I, He, She, its always the full name of the character, this hurts how well the book flows together in my opinion. the pros of this book is that it has potential, and a lot of it, the world, power system, along with the presentation and characters all have the ability to turn this book into something amazing. ill re read the book, and edit my review if things change, but as of now this book has potential, and its that potential that leaves there something to be desired in the writing.
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Im greatful that you gave my book a chance and i do understand that there are things i need to change And i will when volume 2 comes out i Will definitely fix everything!
