Review Detail of kuhaku_sora in The Mafia Game ( Hired Gun )

This is a fun story to read! The synopsis is great, and I love it! if the author can execute this perfectly, then you can have my 10 stars!!!! The only thing that I'd like to mention is the usage of onomatopoeia. It is okay to use it, but it would be better if you can add more depth into it. For an example the BAAANG could be improve like "I heard a blaring shot coming from elsewhere. It was like a sond of something cracking abruptly..." something like that.