Review Detail of Chase_Xavier_123 in The Beloved Child of God
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The story is great, the backstory is constructed very well. But I think you should focus on showing rather than telling. The protagonist has a motive for her actions a sign of good story. Author you chose a great cover. Keep up good work
The Beloved Child of God
Mikazuki_Sora
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Mikazuki_SoraAuthorMikazuki_Sora
Chase_Xavier_123Lv3Chase_Xavier_123
Telling : It was the most happiest he had ever felt in his life. Showing : He kept singing a song, the stupid grin didn't left his lips whole day
Mikazuki_Sora:I'm a bit confuse about 'focus on showing rather than telling'. Can you explain that?
Mikazuki_SoraAuthorMikazuki_Sora
Chase_Xavier_123:Telling : It was the most happiest he had ever felt in his life. Showing : He kept singing a song, the stupid grin didn't left his lips whole day