Review Detail of BrewingFantasies in Soul for a Girlfriend?

[Reviewed on: 12-06-2021] GOOD POINTS: - Comical vibe through the chara of female demon/devil - MC is reasonably smart, not too dumb to cringe at all - The flow and pace is fine too - Apparently there are no issues in grammar [will explain further below] - Storyline somewhat resembles 'my pick up artist system' but no it's not a fanfic - MC has a goal to achieve or he will die - At first it gave me 'death note' vibe, then the devil felt a succubus to me as she emerged - It was entertaining~ WEAKNESS: - Synopsis doesn't really tells what's inside, it should be more elaborative on the contract aspect - The initiative strategy in chapter 1 is extremely wrong - No one wants to read the routine of MC, his house, work, what he is wearing, food, etc - The narration is in personal/1st person but the repetition of 'I' is annoying, in about five lines 'i' is overly used seven times! - 1st chapter should have begun by the later half, the upper half is completely dump in my opinion. Since 2 and 3rd chapters are without fillers and absolutely good with hooks, while 1st [initial half] is a turn off. - Devil can read his mind but at places she doesn't respond to his thoughts, why?