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2021-07-24 15:15

well i dun really mind about the grammars since I've read worst ones haha. at least this one is readable since i could fix the grammars in my head as i read through it. I like this fanfic since i like itachi. he a chad lol. anyway keep it up

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Writing Quality 1*- It's just terrible spelling, grammar and spacing; as for spacing the author either does a chapter where he spaces between every single punctuation or he just stuffs 10 paragraphs into one long sentence with no quotations to indicate speech. Story Development 1*- extremely predictable "plot" with unrealistic and unnatural situations/events such as Zeoticus asking a low class devil to be friends with his daughter, Gremory treat their servants best in the underworld but that's in comparison to literal slaves who can be r*ped, murdered or toyed with at will. Character Design 1*- would give 0* if possible why is it every itachi in another world isn't itachi!! The biggest red flag for me was itachi "saving" rias from riser and hitting him itachi would not be foolish enough to implicate himself and his family especially when nothing bad would happen to rias in her own home. That's not the worst though characters don't act like themselves, they act unnaturally and say stupid xianxia lines Christ; anyone with a working brain won't get past chapter 4. Updating Stability 2*- It's new with a cool 9 chapters World Background 1*-I hate fanfics with no world Background it's literally already done for you are you guys too lazy to read a wiki or copy and paste some background and landmarks??? Overall 1.2*- I wouldn't recommend however if you're someone who doesn't mind what's mentioned above nock yourself out. Advice to author- even if English isn't your first language the writing feels like no effort was put in; firstly read some professional novels to see the spacing and dialogue, also download grammarly if you can't afford premium get a mod APK/hacked version. "English isn't my first language" isn't an excuse for authors to put out stuff like this there are tools to help you just need to put in more effort.

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