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2021-06-15 21:02

This story honestly reminds me of my first love back in High school which is a great thing! You get a lot of those sweet butterfly moments mixed with that "hotness overload" which I am all about. There are a few typos and some placement of asterisk description that can be written out but the writing is still cohesive. All-in-all my dear author, you are heading on a pretty stellar start. Don't stop. Tell your story!

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Thank you so much for your review. It means a lot. And, of course, I'll try my best to touch my readers' beautiful memories with my story.

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