Review Detail of kuhaku_sora in The Bloody Angel

The concept is one of the classics. It includes things such as coronations, royalty settings, and more! I really am a fan of those things (somewhat), and i do love your book~ There are some points that I'd like to point out. In making dialogue, it would be better if you could make the proper commans and periods for the conversations for example. "I want to be the Queen of the Lakes and Dolphins. I want a handsome king, just like you, daddy!" Bella smiled. Bella and Steve pointed towards the Queen's crown with glee. "I want that one." Steve told, "Your crows is so heavy, deaddy. I don't want it!" The king nodded, "Yes, dear." Some of the dialogues here a bit mixed and matched, so try implementing the tips I gave you and from the internet. Kudos for the author!