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2021-07-14 13:05

Amazing! Amazing! Your writing style is like others just said. Though, perhaps you can describe things with show rather than tell? [img=recommend][img=recommend]

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Thank you very much. Indeed I am really struggling in that area. I'll do my best to improve more <3

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