Review Detail of dabo1 in No Longer Available 2
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It starts good, but then it goes slowly towards "weird". The main issues are the parts where readers are directly addressed or societies get introduced only to then not be used for a long while. Would be better to only introduce them when they will appear more. Also maybe update the description of the story or tags. The story slowly develops in a direction that is no longer expected from it.
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Bobbydale_Murr
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It's been a while since I read the story, so I can't remember exactly which races there are, but there were some introduced that were introduced and then never appeared again in any relevant way(e.g. Yggdrasilian Guardians). So it's not that I want more switching between perspectives, but the opposite. Like only show the race if they do something that will be relevant to the story in like the next ~20 or so chapters and you feel it isn't enough to just show it from Synthesis perspective. You get otherwise too many parallel actions to keep track of and break the flow of the story.
Bobbydale_Murr:Hmm, the story is quite packed, so i am switching between perspectives but i will show more of the other races if that is how you feel.
