Review Detail of Yoan_Roturier in ALLISON'S SECOND CHANCE AT LOVE

Ok, my favorite character is the child. She's too cute. The writing can be a bit shaky. Sometimes I feel like you lack some "Show". I feel like you "Tell" too much. It can be a bit cramped. There are typos that you can easily fix, do give your chaps another read. Example: missing capital letters. Storywise, so far so good. Can't judge much from the chaps as of now. However, there is clearly some work on the character development and background. It shows a bit of planning. I left you one or two comments for you to improve some stuff. I hope it helps. Keep up the good work. (5 stars because you gave yourself a 4 four stars xD hahaha)