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ZaUsTLv103yr
2021-06-17 21:03

Writing Quality is as good as it can be (with some error's here and there but not anything major). Stability of Updates. With 2 chaps a day is really good, you can always comeback the next day and read 2 more chapters. Story Development is a bit slow in the start, but it builds up in later chapters, and frankly is really good. Character Design is a bit lacking in my opinion as I don't really know what the mc is looking like, other than he looks like his father, and what we were told in chapter 1. World Background is really good but slow, we first really get some world building in later chapter (around chapter 60) Altogether a really good story with good upload schedule, super immersed in the world, and is really looking forward to what happens next!

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IcyHotLv13

does the grammar improve from the beginning chapters or not?

ZaUsTLv10

It does improve somewhat early on, don't know when specifically though. And if you just enjoy the story its not even noticeable tbh :) (i've seen way wayyyyyy worse grammar on this website also)

IcyHot:does the grammar improve from the beginning chapters or not?
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