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2021-06-15 04:02

The author's great attribute is, they provide the questions for the readers that makes them curious enough to read the story. And then they get trapped in those well distanced paras of nicely crafted words, and lost in the story. The story unfolds, enticing plot moves forward and the author promptly goes on answering all those questions plus leaving new ones to edge on the curiosity. That's good. This story is great. It's loaded with potential, do try it. (Dear author, it's just my humble personal opinion, I think you're telling so much and there is not enough show. I mean I got the emotions and all but I had trouble properly imagining it. Creating it in my head. It can be just a problem with me. I might not be understanding the point of view by which you tell the story. Sorry I don't meaning anything bad by sharing this."

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Thank you so much. The story is written in the FL’s perspective so it’s a first person’s point of view. I’ll keep your words in mind and try working on it. Thanks so much👍👍

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