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2021-11-09 07:40

the story is very bad, the first 4 chapters are useless they only serve to make chapters and add nonsense clichés, bad start and the more the story advances the worse it is, mc from 3 wishes had other gifts for no reason and too much op, l 'author does not seem to know fairytail or dragonball, mc looks like a video game character who takes skills as if he unlocks skills in a game, grammar is pitiful and the author does not explain well what the protagonist does and puts few details, I could say other things but i think i said enough author i advise you to read fairytail and remake history (mc seems to practice immortality with qi core and other stuff lol)

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Fortunatus14
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I appreciate the feedback. Is there any way i could improve? I know that I’m slightly inconsistent, and that rhe MC is broken. But I would like to point out that everything I’m writing, has been thus far from Fairy Tail alone. I have also read the Wiki for both Dragon Ball and Fairy Tail, as they are among my favorite Anime. if you take a glance at the Auxillary Chapters, you’ll see that the abilities are clearly displayed there. With immense detail, since those chapters contain a condensed version of what the Wiki has on it. On rewatching Fairy Tail, you must mean the Canon. I would like to let you know, according to the timeline provided in the Wiki, Erza is born in 765, and Gray’s family is killed by Deliora in 774. Lyon joins Ur 3 months before Gray. The current time in the plot (of the fanfic) is the year 772. Erza also spent 3-4 years in the Tower of Heaven. Therefore, unless you count the training of the Dragon Slayers In the 300s or the establishment of Fairy Tail under Mavis, Hades/Precht, and Makarov in the late 600s to mid 736, or even the death of Cana’s mother’s death and Cana’s subsequent joining of Fairy Tail near the beginning of 772, canon hasn’t started. As for the last comment about the “cultivation to immortality,” neither the Wiki, nor the show gave much importance to the unlocking of Ki. At best it was like half an episode, when Gohan was teaching Videl how to fly, pre Majin Buu. He described that reaching out and using ki is something of a click, and boom you can use it. I figured I could relate some part of it outside of DB to something with more descriptIon to allow the reader to understand how the unlocking of the Ki works. After all, most fanfics just say the MC can use Ki without problems.

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SOMMO_ARCANOLv2

this thing can be confused in dragonball but be aware that the ki they use is different from chi (like konfupanda or avatar) or qi (in xianxia, ​​huanhua and other cultivation novels), dragonball ki is energy that can be trained and comes produced by the body and can be used in various ways if you see in dragonball in the cell saga we can see that Ki can be artificially produced and stolen but this is like disposable energy and is continuously produced by the body and Ki goes towards destruction until you become a god of destruction, in the show you see that the Ki produced is indirectly proportional to what is taken as food and other substances (krillin can destroy planets but continues to eat like a normal human perhaps a little more ), dragonball has no core or other but it works that the stronger the body the more Ki they produce, the body is like a battery it contains energy and can be charged and discharged instead the magic of fairytail works with Ethernan and are magical particles that are absorbed into the body where they are used for spells, when a spell is used it uses both energy in the body and that outside (from an object or around itself), wizards cannot perceive well their container but they can have an estimate (it is like saying that you are tired but you do not know how tired you are) the energy of the wizards is in the origin, the wizards also have a second origin that is not usually used (it is like the human body we only use part of our muscles, with training we can use them more but only in certain cases we can use more strength), the difference between dragonball and fairytail is that Ki does not depend on the energy of the world but more like a ' energy that comes from oneself and magic does not, in dragonball the techniques of Ki are very difficult to learn (for humans, some cases are exceptional), at the beginning of dragomball goku met Roshi and copied the kemahemeha with a single glance and he said I am there o it took many years to learn it, dragonball's Ki can be used in a brute way even without complicated techniques instead the magic is more complex is studied or you are born in it Ki also has many special abilities that are not only about destruction like when goku in the freezer saga meets kulilin he puts a hand on his head and sees his memories even if he didn't understand well even he did it even when he learns teleportation is different from the only ability to destroy so we can think that Ki can do more things than destruction but this has not been explored, in history no way has been shown to use Ki to heal in canon (divine Ki is not included) I hope I have been helpful

Fortunatus14
Fortunatus14Author

As true as that is, my only problem with the Ki from Dragon Ball is that there is no definition on how it is unlocked, nor is there a process. It isnt mentioned in the show and it isn’t in rhe Wiki either. I haven’t gotten rid of any special properties of the Ki from Dragon Ball, nor have I made the magic from Fairy Tail any different. I have simply pointed out that the Ki from Dragon Ball can be moulded inro a form of pseudomagic from Fairy Tail. Since this world is a mash up from 3 separate universes, this decision is justified in my mind. Especially so, since nothing that is unique to each is being taken away, simply added to, in order to make writing a bit easier on me.

SOMMO_ARCANO:this thing can be confused in dragonball but be aware that the ki they use is different from chi (like konfupanda or avatar) or qi (in xianxia, ​​huanhua and other cultivation novels), dragonball ki is energy that can be trained and comes produced by the body and can be used in various ways if you see in dragonball in the cell saga we can see that Ki can be artificially produced and stolen but this is like disposable energy and is continuously produced by the body and Ki goes towards destruction until you become a god of destruction, in the show you see that the Ki produced is indirectly proportional to what is taken as food and other substances (krillin can destroy planets but continues to eat like a normal human perhaps a little more ), dragonball has no core or other but it works that the stronger the body the more Ki they produce, the body is like a battery it contains energy and can be charged and discharged instead the magic of fairytail works with Ethernan and are magical particles that are absorbed into the body where they are used for spells, when a spell is used it uses both energy in the body and that outside (from an object or around itself), wizards cannot perceive well their container but they can have an estimate (it is like saying that you are tired but you do not know how tired you are) the energy of the wizards is in the origin, the wizards also have a second origin that is not usually used (it is like the human body we only use part of our muscles, with training we can use them more but only in certain cases we can use more strength), the difference between dragonball and fairytail is that Ki does not depend on the energy of the world but more like a ' energy that comes from oneself and magic does not, in dragonball the techniques of Ki are very difficult to learn (for humans, some cases are exceptional), at the beginning of dragomball goku met Roshi and copied the kemahemeha with a single glance and he said I am there o it took many years to learn it, dragonball's Ki can be used in a brute way even without complicated techniques instead the magic is more complex is studied or you are born in it Ki also has many special abilities that are not only about destruction like when goku in the freezer saga meets kulilin he puts a hand on his head and sees his memories even if he didn't understand well even he did it even when he learns teleportation is different from the only ability to destroy so we can think that Ki can do more things than destruction but this has not been explored, in history no way has been shown to use Ki to heal in canon (divine Ki is not included) I hope I have been helpful
SOMMO_ARCANO
SOMMO_ARCANOLv2

Stronger ia body more qi they have(some race are different) also ki didint unlock but you born with it

Fortunatus14:As true as that is, my only problem with the Ki from Dragon Ball is that there is no definition on how it is unlocked, nor is there a process. It isnt mentioned in the show and it isn’t in rhe Wiki either. I haven’t gotten rid of any special properties of the Ki from Dragon Ball, nor have I made the magic from Fairy Tail any different. I have simply pointed out that the Ki from Dragon Ball can be moulded inro a form of pseudomagic from Fairy Tail. Since this world is a mash up from 3 separate universes, this decision is justified in my mind. Especially so, since nothing that is unique to each is being taken away, simply added to, in order to make writing a bit easier on me.
Fortunatus14
Fortunatus14Author

But for Videl, pre Buu, she had to sense her internal Ki and “unlock” it to use it and make ki blasts or Fly.

SOMMO_ARCANO:Stronger ia body more qi they have(some race are different) also ki didint unlock but you born with it
SOMMO_ARCANO
SOMMO_ARCANOLv2

Was weak

Fortunatus14:But for Videl, pre Buu, she had to sense her internal Ki and “unlock” it to use it and make ki blasts or Fly.
Fortunatus14
Fortunatus14Author

The point still stands though. Videl had a hard time using Ki, but in terms of “unlocking” it, she was somewhat of a prodigy. She unlocked it after 2 tries.

SOMMO_ARCANO:Was weak
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