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I didn't enjoy the story. Mainly because it's exactly the same as the original TBATE but with a different narrative and the said 'mc' is still just a side character to Arthur. Everything that happens in the OG manga happens in this fanfic, no changes whatsoever. Just a lazy work of copy and paste with an extra side character that does everything Arthur does. I mean from awakening at the same time, to getting beast wills at the same time, getting trained at the same time, becoming adventurers at the same time. The only difference I see is that the authors OC is even a little weaker than Art in TBATE. Is it in enjoyable read? Maybe, that is if you haven't read the OG manga in a while and could tolerate reading it a second time. I will give props to the author with Good spelling and grammar work in which you rarely see in fanfics. Good luck author đ
TBATE- A force to be reckoned with
Erebus512
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Well as his twin their paths couldn't diverge much yet, I mean if Arthur can awaken at 3, why couldn't Fay do too, since he's also reincarnated. And yeah getting beast wills at the same time was me being too lazy to cook up some oyher power up to match to Dragons Awakening. He needed to be trained by someone, Alice wouldn't let Reynolds train him too hard and that would hamper his progress and make him much weaker. Now for becoming adventurers at the same time, yes I could've changed it by making him stay for longer, but then again he would fall back in his training as an adventurer. And how can you say he's weaker than Arthur when you haven't seen him fight after the 2 year timeskip, tha main fight against the Elderwood Guardian hasn't been shown yet, maybe if you had stayed you could've seen exactly how strong he is, but hey if you drop it I can't do much to change your mind, other than beg you to stay. But I won't do that, I don't write this to satisfy each and every reader, I write it to express ideas that have been festering in my mind, and the reaction I had to certain events. Also thank you for the compliment although I believe I dwarf in comparison to some of the authors of the fanfictions I've read throughout the years.
You see author, While i am not claiming it is easy to write, more like it is extremly difficult, the problem is, there has been MINIMAL change to the plot. i mean, for me, the only change is there being a different person inculded. I mean, even your lines, some of them are straight up copies from thr Novel or manga. Now, about the part where iF we dont likt it, we shouldnt read it, thaT dosent really make sense, because the reason any author uploads is to see if people witht the same pasion got the work, want to see it go a different way. I mean, the perks of writing fanfictions is that the world and plot is pre built, and it Is easier to change the plot than an original. However, you barely changed abything. The reason I personnally am sticking through is because your story has SOO much potential, Right hand of the king, noW twin brother. Where could you have changed something majorly? Well, maybe the fight, where Arthur gets his beast will, maybe the mc should have lived and gone on with hos parents. But you were lazy, so its fine. How about maybe during the training arc? Getting another mentor? Maybe an OC character where the dad and mum ttavlled with before. Anyway these are just thoughts of mine, and just showinf the readers perspective more, we just want a difference from the plot.
Erebus512:Don't like it, don't read it. As I said before, them being twins really does make it difficult to diverge their paths. It will diverge, just not for a few more chapters.
About the 'if you don't like it don't read it part' While yeah it doesn't make sense from most authors POV, but for me it does. You see I am writing this for fun for changes I would've liked. Hence the beast will. As for my lines being a straight up copy from the novel and comic, I agree it is the base of the story and I did try to change some dialogs by mashing their dialogs in the novel and comic (yes there are differences in the dialog) and changing bits and pieces. What you said about hin staying with his parents, well if I did do that and only gave him white core or something, people would complain that hes weaker than Arthur, they already do in fact. And as for barely changing anything, well Faydens path is diverging from canon from the school arc, I'll make it completely different in the training arc (nothing like what you said tho, its different, some people might say its basically a copy and edit of epheotus training arc but I digress) I'll also change the war arc, although he will be there for some of the events, a small part in the battle before arthur fought against jagrette (It depends on if I do decide to save Cedry and Jona), similarly he will be there in the wall incident, and before the battle of bloodfrost because we don't know much about jow exactly the castle fell, maybe if tbate was a completed story I would've made more major changes, but since irs not and the facjlt that making such changes could very well mess up the timeline I am refraining from changing too much, although I will take some risks on that here and there. Up until now there hasn't been many major events, like all thats happened is the fall, training in elenoir, elderwood guardian, and yeah thats it. Now lets look at whats coming, widows crypt, lucastration, imprisonment, revelations, training, joining the war, jagrette and uto, betrayal of rahdeas and olfred, the wall incident, bloodfrost, fall of dicathen, hiding in the cave, tessia running away, fight against nico and cadel, and book 8 whatever I plan to do in its place. You see? Its just begun, there isn't many pivotial events yet, theres still so many more arcs, so many fights(I'll add my own ones as well so don't worry), so many deaths(some which I might prevent) and so many surprises to come (yes original ones as well) So yeah, I'll say this, bear with me for this is only the beginning . . . . . ...after the end Sorry couldn't resist.
stay_at_home_pig:You see author, While i am not claiming it is easy to write, more like it is extremly difficult, the problem is, there has been MINIMAL change to the plot. i mean, for me, the only change is there being a different person inculded. I mean, even your lines, some of them are straight up copies from thr Novel or manga. Now, about the part where iF we dont likt it, we shouldnt read it, thaT dosent really make sense, because the reason any author uploads is to see if people witht the same pasion got the work, want to see it go a different way. I mean, the perks of writing fanfictions is that the world and plot is pre built, and it Is easier to change the plot than an original. However, you barely changed abything. The reason I personnally am sticking through is because your story has SOO much potential, Right hand of the king, noW twin brother. Where could you have changed something majorly? Well, maybe the fight, where Arthur gets his beast will, maybe the mc should have lived and gone on with hos parents. But you were lazy, so its fine. How about maybe during the training arc? Getting another mentor? Maybe an OC character where the dad and mum ttavlled with before. Anyway these are just thoughts of mine, and just showinf the readers perspective more, we just want a difference from the plot.
Thank you Author for being able to take the critisim, ngl, when I question most authors they try to attack but so I stopped, so i LOve how you explaines yourself. And thanks that you kinda said your plans, so i will continue tO read. đ
Erebus512:About the 'if you don't like it don't read it part' While yeah it doesn't make sense from most authors POV, but for me it does. You see I am writing this for fun for changes I would've liked. Hence the beast will. As for my lines being a straight up copy from the novel and comic, I agree it is the base of the story and I did try to change some dialogs by mashing their dialogs in the novel and comic (yes there are differences in the dialog) and changing bits and pieces. What you said about hin staying with his parents, well if I did do that and only gave him white core or something, people would complain that hes weaker than Arthur, they already do in fact. And as for barely changing anything, well Faydens path is diverging from canon from the school arc, I'll make it completely different in the training arc (nothing like what you said tho, its different, some people might say its basically a copy and edit of epheotus training arc but I digress) I'll also change the war arc, although he will be there for some of the events, a small part in the battle before arthur fought against jagrette (It depends on if I do decide to save Cedry and Jona), similarly he will be there in the wall incident, and before the battle of bloodfrost because we don't know much about jow exactly the castle fell, maybe if tbate was a completed story I would've made more major changes, but since irs not and the facjlt that making such changes could very well mess up the timeline I am refraining from changing too much, although I will take some risks on that here and there. Up until now there hasn't been many major events, like all thats happened is the fall, training in elenoir, elderwood guardian, and yeah thats it. Now lets look at whats coming, widows crypt, lucastration, imprisonment, revelations, training, joining the war, jagrette and uto, betrayal of rahdeas and olfred, the wall incident, bloodfrost, fall of dicathen, hiding in the cave, tessia running away, fight against nico and cadel, and book 8 whatever I plan to do in its place. You see? Its just begun, there isn't many pivotial events yet, theres still so many more arcs, so many fights(I'll add my own ones as well so don't worry), so many deaths(some which I might prevent) and so many surprises to come (yes original ones as well) So yeah, I'll say this, bear with me for this is only the beginning . . . . . ...after the end Sorry couldn't resist.
stay_at_home_pig:Thank you Author for being able to take the critisim, ngl, when I question most authors they try to attack but so I stopped, so i LOve how you explaines yourself. And thanks that you kinda said your plans, so i will continue tO read. đ
bro ur a die hard fan of BATE man I have readed novel but not that far , anyway story going good don't drop it because of the people đđđ
Erebus512:About the 'if you don't like it don't read it part' While yeah it doesn't make sense from most authors POV, but for me it does. You see I am writing this for fun for changes I would've liked. Hence the beast will. As for my lines being a straight up copy from the novel and comic, I agree it is the base of the story and I did try to change some dialogs by mashing their dialogs in the novel and comic (yes there are differences in the dialog) and changing bits and pieces. What you said about hin staying with his parents, well if I did do that and only gave him white core or something, people would complain that hes weaker than Arthur, they already do in fact. And as for barely changing anything, well Faydens path is diverging from canon from the school arc, I'll make it completely different in the training arc (nothing like what you said tho, its different, some people might say its basically a copy and edit of epheotus training arc but I digress) I'll also change the war arc, although he will be there for some of the events, a small part in the battle before arthur fought against jagrette (It depends on if I do decide to save Cedry and Jona), similarly he will be there in the wall incident, and before the battle of bloodfrost because we don't know much about jow exactly the castle fell, maybe if tbate was a completed story I would've made more major changes, but since irs not and the facjlt that making such changes could very well mess up the timeline I am refraining from changing too much, although I will take some risks on that here and there. Up until now there hasn't been many major events, like all thats happened is the fall, training in elenoir, elderwood guardian, and yeah thats it. Now lets look at whats coming, widows crypt, lucastration, imprisonment, revelations, training, joining the war, jagrette and uto, betrayal of rahdeas and olfred, the wall incident, bloodfrost, fall of dicathen, hiding in the cave, tessia running away, fight against nico and cadel, and book 8 whatever I plan to do in its place. You see? Its just begun, there isn't many pivotial events yet, theres still so many more arcs, so many fights(I'll add my own ones as well so don't worry), so many deaths(some which I might prevent) and so many surprises to come (yes original ones as well) So yeah, I'll say this, bear with me for this is only the beginning . . . . . ...after the end Sorry couldn't resist.
laotzu999:bro ur a die hard fan of BATE man I have readed novel but not that far , anyway story going good don't drop it because of the people đđđ
Them being twns has nothing to do with ive read Fanfictions where the Oc and his twin diverge paths ifanything it seemsto me your being lazy
Erebus512:Don't like it, don't read it. As I said before, them being twins really does make it difficult to diverge their paths. It will diverge, just not for a few more chapters.
Huh, that so? Pray tell me, were those fics of completed series? Because Tbate is still ongoing, we're like 60% through the story so theres a lot of things we don't know about their world, sure I could have made Fayden go a complete different way from the fall by sending him to Darv or something, but what do we know about Darv? Even as a novel reader not much about Darv has been revealed yet. What next? I could make him have his own arc during the adventurer bit, but then he would require a guard of his own, possibly one of the twin horns, which btw doesnt give many options, the twin horns themselves said none of them, sans Jasmine, were fit for a guard job. After that arc, I did change things here and there ik the school arc till now, and plan to change even more things as the story advances further.
OOA:Them being twns has nothing to do with ive read Fanfictions where the Oc and his twin diverge paths ifanything it seemsto me your being lazy
Erebus512:Don't like it, don't read it. As I said before, them being twins really does make it difficult to diverge their paths. It will diverge, just not for a few more chapters.
His response of " Don't Like it, don't read it." Does make sense... He's said before that he isn't writing to satisfy everyone since that's quite literally impossible. Though I do agree with you.
stay_at_home_pig:You see author, While i am not claiming it is easy to write, more like it is extremly difficult, the problem is, there has been MINIMAL change to the plot. i mean, for me, the only change is there being a different person inculded. I mean, even your lines, some of them are straight up copies from thr Novel or manga. Now, about the part where iF we dont likt it, we shouldnt read it, thaT dosent really make sense, because the reason any author uploads is to see if people witht the same pasion got the work, want to see it go a different way. I mean, the perks of writing fanfictions is that the world and plot is pre built, and it Is easier to change the plot than an original. However, you barely changed abything. The reason I personnally am sticking through is because your story has SOO much potential, Right hand of the king, noW twin brother. Where could you have changed something majorly? Well, maybe the fight, where Arthur gets his beast will, maybe the mc should have lived and gone on with hos parents. But you were lazy, so its fine. How about maybe during the training arc? Getting another mentor? Maybe an OC character where the dad and mum ttavlled with before. Anyway these are just thoughts of mine, and just showinf the readers perspective more, we just want a difference from the plot.